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Unwanted

I feel like feces in a toilet
unwanted and flushed away
like a rotten egg; scorned
cracked and then thrown away
maybe even like spoiled milk
one taste and i make you sick;
then i'm thrown away
i'm like a bugger in your nose
you just got to get rid of me
like pigeon poop
you wouldn't want me to touch you
it's funny
because to me, you're
like a million bucks
i'll want you all the days of my life
but to you;
i'm just a tissue
that you use
and then,
throw
away

by friendZdogZ
posted on 04/27/2009

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Comment by Basehunter18: Apr 27, 2009 5:09 pm
lol funny how you put yourself as an object
Comment by LunaGetsuna: Apr 27, 2009 5:07 pm
Eh, it wasn't the best, no offense. I would personally put the "and then, throw away" on one line because by putting it on different lines it separates the idea, and therefore, loses some effect. Also in the first line I can kind of see the effect you are going for, but it almost comes off as if you are trying to hard to sound educated; this effect takes away from the power of the poem.
Comment by Keicy7: May 5, 2009 8:25 am
a man your about to make me cry Sad face
Comment by christinaxxnguyen: Apr 27, 2009 6:42 pm
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Comment by xoxoKellieChalifoux: Apr 30, 2009 12:27 pm
lol, but thats sorta how i feel. =[
Comment by HeartlessAngel: Apr 30, 2009 2:37 pm
How sad Sad face
Great poem though Kira.
Comment by Broken2Gether: May 15, 2009 10:41 am
wow. that's true
Comment by LostInDarkness: May 22, 2009 5:24 am
ewwww...lol good poem though
Comment by exquisite: Jul 18, 2009 5:36 pm
Well that was very interesting. I actually liked it a lot to tell yu the truth.
Comment by Heartbroken87: Jul 12, 2009 7:39 pm
Nice.totally understandin u
Comment by blackdeath2482: Jul 16, 2009 9:07 pm
ewwwwwwwwwwww
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