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Unfair

I hold her so tenderly, so gently, with so much care,
For hours now I have done nothing but stare.

Her tiny little hands no bigger than my thumb,
Her tiny little nose no bigger than a crumb.

She will grow to be a success at everything she does,
She will never be a quitter or a failure like I was.

She will cure many diseases and help the cause for world peace,
She will see to stopping violence and that world hunger cease.

I said that she wasn't a quitter and I don't change my stance,
But this stillborn little girl never really had a chance.

by secretpoet
posted on 07/06/2007

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Comments: 118
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Comment by Neji2017: Jun 24, 2008 12:00 am
Wow I see that I am among quite a few lovers of this poem. Truly my heart goes out to you. I have a daughter, and no words can explain how you felt, but the fact that you found them anyway, is beautiful. She will do so many things in this life, through you, which should make you feel special because usually it is the other way around. You have my vote, my sympathy, my best wishes, my prayers, and kudos. Truly admirable.
Comment by ImThatBloodyMassacre: Jun 23, 2008 7:13 pm
I am amazed too feel such power in a poem like this. The sadness is overwhelming. I can feel it coursing though my body.
vote up.
Comment by oceansoul: Jun 23, 2008 4:30 am
Wondeful!
Comment by PoemWritingGuy: Jul 7, 2007 12:22 am
After the second last line, I already knew what the last line would say and I just got this chill in my face and back... and then when I finished reading the last line, I got a tear in my eye. This was very touching, it was so full of hope and then it twisted at the end and became very sad. I liked it. This has definetly got my vote. Well done.
Comment by MechanicalAnimal: Jul 7, 2007 4:11 am
Gotta say I didn't see that coming, and I had that chill too when I read the last line. This is probably one of the most powerful poems I've ever read. Very good, but very sad. I'm voting too.
Comment by missingmom: Jul 7, 2007 6:22 am
I'm at a loss for words. Votong up too.
Comment by FreeFalling: Jul 7, 2007 7:46 am
This is the saddest poem I've read so far...good job.
Comment by kayla: Jul 7, 2007 1:01 pm
Heart breakingSad face wonderful poem.
Comment by SeaInsideMe: Jul 7, 2007 6:11 pm
while reading, i felt such joy and then instantaneous sadness. thank you for sharing this pain.
Comment by FallenAngel: Jul 7, 2007 6:21 pm
T_T so reviting, such power very nice, ^^ good poem my poetic friend
Comment by Sinnocence: Jul 8, 2007 7:03 am
i liked it alot. ur word count n pace it off but who worries ay??u got a good rhymeing scheme going tho. i think that was ur best part tho. ;)
Comment by NeVeRmOrE: Jul 9, 2007 11:26 am
wow its sad but its really good
i love it<3
Comment by tearsofrain: Jul 9, 2007 1:26 pm
omigosh. that i so... so beautiful. wow. just... what they said.
Comment by man0fst33l: Jul 9, 2007 9:42 pm
Speechless...
Comment by footprints: Jul 10, 2007 1:46 am
I just found out that I am pregnant... so the tenderness and hope you convey really captivated me from the onset. Then the chilling twist at the end tore at my heart. Beautifully written. Also voted upSmiley
Comment by nickson104: Jul 10, 2007 8:17 am
i think those chills are contageious Smiley its amazing, speechless :o well actually im not because im saying this but still... i love it its really sad. vote up!
Comment by Novembre: Jul 10, 2007 5:28 pm
nice poem..
Comment by sexxiione214: Jul 12, 2007 10:50 am
oh my gosh. this poem is the saddest one i read on this thing so far. i had a tear come down.
Comment by kitcat92: Jul 13, 2007 7:43 am
OMG!!!! this poem is sssoooo sad! It definately touched my heart! Thank you for sharing this...I voted up for you!!
Comment by angelina: Jul 13, 2007 8:03 am
Wonderful poem. The build up of the hopes and dreams are beautiful. I am so sorry for your loss.
Comment by MissSunshineBumbleBee: Jul 14, 2007 9:06 am
voted up without hesitating
Comment by puppery: Jul 14, 2007 12:43 pm
da boy or girl
Comment by jacobc: Jun 30, 2008 7:01 pm
Very nice poem about your daughter.
Comment by forever: Jul 16, 2007 4:08 am
love the way you expressed everything in a twisted way
awsome writing
Comment by MsKeys1707: Jul 17, 2007 6:18 am
OMG this is soo sadSad face
I really don't know what to say
the flow is incredible and the feeling and expression is soo real
AMAZINGLY WRITTEN, you have my vote
Take Care
Comment by Jenifer5: Jul 17, 2007 8:24 am
This poem was touching.
Comment by Raistlin99: Jul 17, 2007 7:43 pm
Wow good poem, very touching.
Comment by friendZdogZ: Jul 18, 2007 2:39 am
this is a great poem i'd have to say one i might not forget
nickson i right cuz i caught it
it's very sad i mean i never even saw it comming
it' very great
Comment by darkheart27: Jul 20, 2007 11:54 am
this poem touched my heart so powerfully. I haven't read a poem as touching and terrific as this is one in such a long time.
Comment by autumnwinter: Jul 25, 2007 7:24 pm
it raised the hairs on the back of my neck. wow! speechless. keep writing!
Comment by isitrite: Jul 26, 2007 12:47 am
this made me so sad and then to be grateful for the air i breath
Comment by imaguy123: Jul 2, 2008 6:42 am
i'm not a parent yet, and far from it...I can only imagine the painful inspiration behind this poem. I cried when my goldfish died, i really don't know what i would do if i had a stillborn child...
Comment by imaguy123: Jul 2, 2008 6:42 am
i'm not a parent yet, and far from it...I can only imagine the painful inspiration behind this poem. I cried when my goldfish died, i really don't know what i would do if i had a stillborn child...
Comment by cooper: Aug 3, 2007 10:24 am
this is a very well writen poem! it did make me cry though. nice work. and im really sorry!!
Comment by friendZdogZ: Aug 5, 2007 11:36 am
man every single time i read this, it gets to me
Comment by vampireheart: Aug 10, 2007 10:36 am
amazing!!!!
i love it

xD
Comment by loseroflife: Aug 17, 2007 12:18 pm
so sad,but a really good poem
Comment by sweetnrosie: Aug 17, 2007 1:44 pm
omg...this is so sad. it makes me want to cry, its a really great poem. good job!
Comment by babe: Aug 18, 2007 6:13 pm
Lost for words>Ive been there.
Comment by Blazen: Aug 22, 2007 4:34 am
wow this is amazing, i felt the same chill as everyone else. vote up
Comment by Tequilla: Aug 23, 2007 7:18 am
Sad but good! I liked it a lot!
Comment by beth33: Aug 24, 2007 10:50 am
that was so true. it made me think anything can happen. i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment by BrokenN2: Jun 24, 2008 6:08 pm
I'm speachless it was amazing.
Comment by Sari: Aug 26, 2007 12:35 pm
sad
Comment by loveseekerhatefinder: Aug 27, 2007 11:11 am
i like that. its very touching. sadSad face, but excellent
Comment by soul2soul: Aug 30, 2007 12:46 pm
I am so sorry. She didn't even get a chance at life. Great poem.
Comment by fAiTHsTeArs41: Sep 3, 2007 4:53 pm
I am really sorry....I love this poem soooo much...probably the best one I read...and probably WILL be the best one I'll read
Comment by fAiTHsTeArs41: Sep 3, 2007 8:04 pm
I have to comment this one again...I just can't stop readin this...This is like...If I'm correct maybe my 10th time if not more that I reasd this
Comment by theunluvd: Sep 18, 2007 5:11 pm
I guess there is nothing i can say that everyone else didn't. I understand the pain of losing someone before they even get to be who they are.. It's just an all-around poem, and the words were just brilliant. I can tell this really came from the heart.. Not just the heart, but the PURE-heart, the one that people don't know they have. Thank you for sharing, its a fleeting hope for other mothers out there that have maybe suffered the same loss. The best thing about life is that it goes on.. Good luck in what you do!
Comment by StarburstCrazy: Sep 26, 2007 10:16 am
OMG!!! wow.....thtz touching i mean it i like it ^_^
Comment by kilove: Sep 27, 2007 4:02 pm
WOW! SPEECHLESS!!!Smiley Sad face
Comment by LaurinxLaLa: Oct 18, 2007 11:04 am
this was really moving..i'm sorry did it happen?
Comment by angerpain33: Oct 18, 2007 5:26 pm
good, sounds really fammiliar maybe i read it before and never commented,, i think i did... really good
Comment by FlyingFree: Oct 22, 2007 3:29 pm
Oh my god... that's really touching. It's so... emotional! It's expressed passionatly. Well done, well done.

<3 Natasha
Comment by Lordharrison: Oct 24, 2007 2:21 am
I love this, a really good a moving poem.
Just amazing!
Comment by Enigma: Oct 25, 2007 9:14 am
It's a moving poem
Comment by PrayForMe: Oct 31, 2007 8:47 pm
Wow....
That was...so good.
Sad, but excellent.
Vote up for this : D
Comment by AngelicallyBroken: Nov 8, 2007 4:23 pm
This was moving...and I got tears in my eyes.I really didn't expect that last line,so sad and good at the same time.(The poem I mean)
Comment by ilessthan3u: Nov 10, 2007 3:29 pm
I've never been so touched by poetry. I thought it was heart-breaking and tragic and perfect and lovely and all things you want to read because to live them would overpower your heart. I love this poem and i think that your an amazing writer without having to read anything more than this work.
Comment by kitten546: Nov 11, 2007 2:58 pm
this is so sad i feel ur pain just from the poem i've never been so touched b4 i love it and feel so sad just reading it.
Comment by laceylue08: Nov 20, 2007 11:22 am
Wow i don't know what i would ever do if i lost my child i might kill myself...but anyways....Vote UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Smiley
Comment by micademia: Nov 23, 2007 12:41 pm
it was very touching, i didnt see that coming, uve got my vote
Comment by HeartlessAngel: Nov 28, 2007 9:06 am
that was amazing. so sad though. it brought tears to my eyes. great poem.
Comment by Brighenti: Dec 2, 2007 2:43 pm
Beatiful, Voted up Open smile
Comment by brockendreams: Dec 3, 2007 9:15 am
that was really deep and i liked it vote up! message sometime
Comment by princessjb100: Dec 7, 2007 10:16 am
unbelievable that is one of the best poems I've ever read
Comment by McRluvr: Dec 7, 2007 10:22 am
ya no kidding great twist at the end it really is terribly sad
Comment by mysterianne': Dec 8, 2007 3:15 am
i realized..the death..i felt it before i even read it.you are gifted beyond measure...i vote up..
Comment by nickson104: Dec 13, 2007 2:00 pm
wow even 5 months after releasing this poem its still getting comments, i mean wow 61 comments

i have already commented before but even on at least the 20th time of reading it (i lost count long ago) it still hits me sooo strongly, shows how brilliant a piece of writing it is... it is probably THE best piece of writing on here
Comment by truckergirl14: Dec 17, 2007 8:39 am
Heart breaking wonderful poem.
Comment by MysticFog: Dec 22, 2007 6:04 pm
wow great poem
Comment by tripnhazy: Dec 24, 2007 5:06 pm
You bring tears to my eyes.
Comment by kassey: Dec 27, 2007 8:13 pm
Such sweet sorrow, so sad but so well written.
Comment by MisGoo: Jan 2, 2008 5:24 pm
stunning.. beautiful work..
Comment by JennaJo: Jan 4, 2008 5:59 pm
I can't say anything that hasn't already been said, but it's a very good poem.
Comment by k123: Jan 6, 2008 12:51 am
that was amazing
Comment by invu2: Jan 6, 2008 2:18 pm
makes me want to cry...Sad face
nice job! keep up the good work!
Comment by jasonfoolio: Jan 7, 2008 1:58 am
wow. its very sad.
but very good.
good job.
Comment by UpAgainstTheWall: Jan 7, 2008 10:38 pm
So sad, but well written.
I really liked it.
Comment by aCrazyApe: Jan 9, 2008 11:30 am
Amazing
the flow was perfect
the rhymes perfect
And all round excellent poem!!
Kuddos
Comment by aqua4ever: Jan 12, 2008 1:58 pm
I dont really get it. Ive read it so many times and just now thought why havent i commented?? Its really good! i like it.
Comment by tobeloved: Jan 19, 2008 12:32 pm
it's really good, very sad, i was tearing up at the end,

vote up
Comment by tinkie: Jan 21, 2008 5:33 pm
i did guess the ending pretty quickly, but i was hoping i was wrong. beautiful poem. if this happened to you i am so sorry and cant even imagine how hard that would of been for you.
Comment by virtualbubblewrap: Jan 23, 2008 5:42 am
Great poem
Comment by emily92: Jan 23, 2008 5:02 pm
ill add to your billion other comments, great job!!
Comment by cravingsoul: Jan 25, 2008 12:24 pm
i could cry!
Comment by tyrantCobain: Feb 2, 2008 7:24 pm
This is a ridicoulosy sad poem......great work though.
You've got a real touch for writing.
Comment by tigerlily: Feb 5, 2008 1:31 am
amazing. i was moved by this poem.
Comment by cryingblackblood: Feb 8, 2008 1:54 pm
this poem is amazing its just so powerful...did you think when you were writing it it would get 82 comments?
Comment by VanishedForever: Feb 12, 2008 9:11 pm
taht poem is so totally true.... i actually had tears in my eyes .. very heart touching... i am sorrie you went through that hun .. i hope things are better for you... hoep to see more of your stuff
Comment by babyboogt82886: Feb 19, 2008 9:45 am
very sad but well written! great work! Smiley
Comment by Manson666: Apr 21, 2008 6:54 am
thats realllllllllly good
Comment by Rocco: Mar 1, 2008 8:58 pm
wow - I'm sorry bro
Comment by meltedsnowman: Mar 10, 2008 9:08 am
im sry u had to go through so much pain. that really isnt fair at all.
Comment by Smitty: Mar 10, 2008 7:02 pm
im am also sorry of your pain. however, i do believe this has inspired you to write one of the most wonderful works of poetry ive ever seen! double kudos for u on this one
Comment by deathmonkey: Mar 16, 2008 11:07 am
Just another message that gets across to everyone but the right people :/
Comment by truckergirl14: Mar 18, 2008 9:46 am
wowly comments
Comment by boosted: Mar 21, 2008 11:00 am
Wow- thats just... wow
Comment by RoSe: Mar 23, 2008 11:07 am
wow awesome poem. u r a great writer Smiley
Comment by XxXBleedingRosexXx: Mar 24, 2008 12:22 am
wwwwwwwwwwwwwow
lots of comments..
haha..

welll..
its good
wait not good

THE BEST!

sad....
....well written

hope 2 b as good as u
=]
Comment by JamStew: Mar 24, 2008 2:10 pm
So sad. I hope everything works out.
Comment by nich123: Mar 24, 2008 10:45 pm
awww =(
Comment by iloveyoubabyxo: Mar 25, 2008 11:03 am
wow your amazing at writing
but cheer up.
someone with talent
Shouldnt let anything get in its way
Comment by urabaka: Mar 26, 2008 11:27 am
Very strong, and very sad.
Comment by Maximus: Mar 27, 2008 5:45 pm
With those words you touched the bottom of my heart.
Comment by HeLovesMeNot: Apr 3, 2008 11:03 pm
soo sad, does she die, i want to know more!!
Comment by asdfyz: Apr 28, 2008 10:18 am
that is soooooo sad! I love that poem,
it is haunting tho. I finished and a shiver went down my spine.
Comment by SPAGACKULA: Apr 29, 2008 3:34 am
A True Love Poem Purely from the Heart and Soul.
Comment by emsue11392: May 2, 2008 10:30 am
really good!!!!!
keep writting!!!!
comment mine please!!!!!!!!
Comment by lifesucks: May 9, 2008 9:52 am
this is a really good poem i really like it a lot
Comment by lindseymarie: May 9, 2008 11:05 am
reallly gooood, but saad
Comment by zoe: May 10, 2008 6:30 pm
i liked it but still verey sad
Comment by zoe: May 10, 2008 6:38 pm
i liked it but still verey sad
Comment by Nickole: Jun 12, 2008 9:29 am
omg i was sittin in class when i read this and i started to cry and everyone looked at me like i was crazy...that was a sad poem
Comment by mzbrowneyez: Jun 13, 2008 2:37 pm
i have a pain in my heart just by reading this poem..it was so sad..but great
Comment by timewornsoul: Jun 28, 2008 1:08 pm
This has got to be the most touching poem Ive heard in a very long time. Fantastic piece of work. As a father I cant imagine losing my little girl. My heart goes out to you.
Comment by greybutterfly: Jun 29, 2008 8:11 am
very deep and strong

Comment by chinawhite: Jul 4, 2008 10:47 pm
This peom is beautifully and simply written.

Which is why it's a great peom because the meaning and emotion behind it isn't simple at all.

Wonderfully done.
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