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Unfair

I hold her so tenderly, so gently, with so much care,
For hours now I have done nothing but stare.

Her tiny little hands no bigger than my thumb,
Her tiny little nose no bigger than a crumb.

She will grow to be a success at everything she does,
She will never be a quitter or a failure like I was.

She will cure many diseases and help the cause for world peace,
She will see to stopping violence and that world hunger cease.

I said that she wasn't a quitter and I don't change my stance,
But this stillborn little girl never really had a chance.

by secretpoet
posted on 07/06/2007

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Comments: 258
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Comment by Neji2017: Jun 24, 2008 12:00 am
Wow I see that I am among quite a few lovers of this poem. Truly my heart goes out to you. I have a daughter, and no words can explain how you felt, but the fact that you found them anyway, is beautiful. She will do so many things in this life, through you, which should make you feel special because usually it is the other way around. You have my vote, my sympathy, my best wishes, my prayers, and kudos. Truly admirable.
Comment by ImThatBloodyMassacre: Jun 23, 2008 7:13 pm
I am amazed too feel such power in a poem like this. The sadness is overwhelming. I can feel it coursing though my body.
vote up.
Comment by oceansoul: Jun 23, 2008 4:30 am
Wondeful!
Comment by PoemWritingGuy: Jul 7, 2007 12:22 am
After the second last line, I already knew what the last line would say and I just got this chill in my face and back... and then when I finished reading the last line, I got a tear in my eye. This was very touching, it was so full of hope and then it twisted at the end and became very sad. I liked it. This has definetly got my vote. Well done.
Comment by MechanicalAnimal: Jul 7, 2007 4:11 am
Gotta say I didn't see that coming, and I had that chill too when I read the last line. This is probably one of the most powerful poems I've ever read. Very good, but very sad. I'm voting too.
Comment by missingmom: Jul 7, 2007 6:22 am
I'm at a loss for words. Votong up too.
Comment by FreeFalling: Jul 7, 2007 7:46 am
This is the saddest poem I've read so far...good job.
Comment by kayla: Jul 7, 2007 1:01 pm
Heart breakingSad face wonderful poem.
Comment by SeaInsideMe: Jul 7, 2007 6:11 pm
while reading, i felt such joy and then instantaneous sadness. thank you for sharing this pain.
Comment by FallenAngel: Jul 7, 2007 6:21 pm
T_T so reviting, such power very nice, ^^ good poem my poetic friend
Comment by Sinnocence: Jul 8, 2007 7:03 am
i liked it alot. ur word count n pace it off but who worries ay??u got a good rhymeing scheme going tho. i think that was ur best part tho. ;)
Comment by NeVeRmOrE: Jul 9, 2007 11:26 am
wow its sad but its really good
i love it<3
Comment by tearsofrain: Jul 9, 2007 1:26 pm
omigosh. that i so... so beautiful. wow. just... what they said.
Comment by man0fst33l: Jul 9, 2007 9:42 pm
Speechless...
Comment by footprints: Jul 10, 2007 1:46 am
I just found out that I am pregnant... so the tenderness and hope you convey really captivated me from the onset. Then the chilling twist at the end tore at my heart. Beautifully written. Also voted upSmiley
Comment by nickson104: Jul 10, 2007 8:17 am
i think those chills are contageious Smiley its amazing, speechless :o well actually im not because im saying this but still... i love it its really sad. vote up!
Comment by Novembre: Jul 10, 2007 5:28 pm
nice poem..
Comment by sexxiione214: Jul 12, 2007 10:50 am
oh my gosh. this poem is the saddest one i read on this thing so far. i had a tear come down.
Comment by kitcat92: Jul 13, 2007 7:43 am
OMG!!!! this poem is sssoooo sad! It definately touched my heart! Thank you for sharing this...I voted up for you!!
Comment by angelina: Jul 13, 2007 8:03 am
Wonderful poem. The build up of the hopes and dreams are beautiful. I am so sorry for your loss.
Comment by MissSunshineBumbleBee: Jul 14, 2007 9:06 am
voted up without hesitating
Comment by puppery: Jul 14, 2007 12:43 pm
da boy or girl
Comment by jacobc: Jun 30, 2008 7:01 pm
Very nice poem about your daughter.
Comment by forever: Jul 16, 2007 4:08 am
love the way you expressed everything in a twisted way
awsome writing
Comment by MsKeys1707: Jul 17, 2007 6:18 am
OMG this is soo sadSad face
I really don't know what to say
the flow is incredible and the feeling and expression is soo real
AMAZINGLY WRITTEN, you have my vote
Take Care
Comment by Jenifer5: Jul 17, 2007 8:24 am
This poem was touching.
Comment by Raistlin99: Jul 17, 2007 7:43 pm
Wow good poem, very touching.
Comment by friendZdogZ: Jul 18, 2007 2:39 am
this is a great poem i'd have to say one i might not forget
nickson i right cuz i caught it
it's very sad i mean i never even saw it comming
it' very great
Comment by darkheart27: Jul 20, 2007 11:54 am
this poem touched my heart so powerfully. I haven't read a poem as touching and terrific as this is one in such a long time.
Comment by autumnwinter: Jul 25, 2007 7:24 pm
it raised the hairs on the back of my neck. wow! speechless. keep writing!
Comment by isitrite: Jul 26, 2007 12:47 am
this made me so sad and then to be grateful for the air i breath
Comment by imaguy123: Jul 2, 2008 6:42 am
i'm not a parent yet, and far from it...I can only imagine the painful inspiration behind this poem. I cried when my goldfish died, i really don't know what i would do if i had a stillborn child...
Comment by imaguy123: Jul 2, 2008 6:42 am
i'm not a parent yet, and far from it...I can only imagine the painful inspiration behind this poem. I cried when my goldfish died, i really don't know what i would do if i had a stillborn child...
Comment by cooper: Aug 3, 2007 10:24 am
this is a very well writen poem! it did make me cry though. nice work. and im really sorry!!
Comment by friendZdogZ: Aug 5, 2007 11:36 am
man every single time i read this, it gets to me
Comment by vampireheart: Aug 10, 2007 10:36 am
amazing!!!!
i love it

xD
Comment by loseroflife: Aug 17, 2007 12:18 pm
so sad,but a really good poem
Comment by sweetnrosie: Aug 17, 2007 1:44 pm
omg...this is so sad. it makes me want to cry, its a really great poem. good job!
Comment by babe: Aug 18, 2007 6:13 pm
Lost for words>Ive been there.
Comment by Blazen: Aug 22, 2007 4:34 am
wow this is amazing, i felt the same chill as everyone else. vote up
Comment by Tequilla: Aug 23, 2007 7:18 am
Sad but good! I liked it a lot!
Comment by beth33: Aug 24, 2007 10:50 am
that was so true. it made me think anything can happen. i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment by BrokenN2: Jun 24, 2008 6:08 pm
I'm speachless it was amazing.
Comment by Sari: Aug 26, 2007 12:35 pm
sad
Comment by loveseekerhatefinder: Aug 27, 2007 11:11 am
i like that. its very touching. sadSad face, but excellent
Comment by soul2soul: Aug 30, 2007 12:46 pm
I am so sorry. She didn't even get a chance at life. Great poem.
Comment by fAiTHsTeArs41: Sep 3, 2007 4:53 pm
I am really sorry....I love this poem soooo much...probably the best one I read...and probably WILL be the best one I'll read
Comment by fAiTHsTeArs41: Sep 3, 2007 8:04 pm
I have to comment this one again...I just can't stop readin this...This is like...If I'm correct maybe my 10th time if not more that I reasd this
Comment by theunluvd: Sep 18, 2007 5:11 pm
I guess there is nothing i can say that everyone else didn't. I understand the pain of losing someone before they even get to be who they are.. It's just an all-around poem, and the words were just brilliant. I can tell this really came from the heart.. Not just the heart, but the PURE-heart, the one that people don't know they have. Thank you for sharing, its a fleeting hope for other mothers out there that have maybe suffered the same loss. The best thing about life is that it goes on.. Good luck in what you do!
Comment by StarburstCrazy: Sep 26, 2007 10:16 am
OMG!!! wow.....thtz touching i mean it i like it ^_^
Comment by kilove: Sep 27, 2007 4:02 pm
WOW! SPEECHLESS!!!Smiley Sad face
Comment by LaurinxLaLa: Oct 18, 2007 11:04 am
this was really moving..i'm sorry did it happen?
Comment by angerpain33: Oct 18, 2007 5:26 pm
good, sounds really fammiliar maybe i read it before and never commented,, i think i did... really good
Comment by FlyingFree: Oct 22, 2007 3:29 pm
Oh my god... that's really touching. It's so... emotional! It's expressed passionatly. Well done, well done.

<3 Natasha
Comment by Lordharrison: Oct 24, 2007 2:21 am
I love this, a really good a moving poem.
Just amazing!
Comment by Enigma: Oct 25, 2007 9:14 am
It's a moving poem
Comment by PrayForMe: Oct 31, 2007 8:47 pm
Wow....
That was...so good.
Sad, but excellent.
Vote up for this : D
Comment by AngelicallyBroken: Nov 8, 2007 4:23 pm
This was moving...and I got tears in my eyes.I really didn't expect that last line,so sad and good at the same time.(The poem I mean)
Comment by ilessthan3u: Nov 10, 2007 3:29 pm
I've never been so touched by poetry. I thought it was heart-breaking and tragic and perfect and lovely and all things you want to read because to live them would overpower your heart. I love this poem and i think that your an amazing writer without having to read anything more than this work.
Comment by kitten546: Nov 11, 2007 2:58 pm
this is so sad i feel ur pain just from the poem i've never been so touched b4 i love it and feel so sad just reading it.
Comment by laceylue08: Nov 20, 2007 11:22 am
Wow i don't know what i would ever do if i lost my child i might kill myself...but anyways....Vote UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Smiley
Comment by micademia: Nov 23, 2007 12:41 pm
it was very touching, i didnt see that coming, uve got my vote
Comment by HeartlessAngel: Nov 28, 2007 9:06 am
that was amazing. so sad though. it brought tears to my eyes. great poem.
Comment by Brighenti: Dec 2, 2007 2:43 pm
Beatiful, Voted up Open smile
Comment by brockendreams: Dec 3, 2007 9:15 am
that was really deep and i liked it vote up! message sometime
Comment by princessjb100: Dec 7, 2007 10:16 am
unbelievable that is one of the best poems I've ever read
Comment by McRluvr: Dec 7, 2007 10:22 am
ya no kidding great twist at the end it really is terribly sad
Comment by mysterianne': Dec 8, 2007 3:15 am
i realized..the death..i felt it before i even read it.you are gifted beyond measure...i vote up..
Comment by nickson104: Dec 13, 2007 2:00 pm
wow even 5 months after releasing this poem its still getting comments, i mean wow 61 comments

i have already commented before but even on at least the 20th time of reading it (i lost count long ago) it still hits me sooo strongly, shows how brilliant a piece of writing it is... it is probably THE best piece of writing on here
Comment by truckergirl14: Dec 17, 2007 8:39 am
Heart breaking wonderful poem.
Comment by Sil3nt22scr3ams: Jun 22, 2009 9:24 am
awww I loved this poem, very beautiful
Comment by MysticFog: Dec 22, 2007 6:04 pm
wow great poem
Comment by tripnhazy: Dec 24, 2007 5:06 pm
You bring tears to my eyes.
Comment by kassey: Dec 27, 2007 8:13 pm
Such sweet sorrow, so sad but so well written.
Comment by MisGoo: Jan 2, 2008 5:24 pm
stunning.. beautiful work..
Comment by JennaJo: Jan 4, 2008 5:59 pm
I can't say anything that hasn't already been said, but it's a very good poem.
Comment by k123: Jan 6, 2008 12:51 am
that was amazing
Comment by invu2: Jan 6, 2008 2:18 pm
makes me want to cry...Sad face
nice job! keep up the good work!
Comment by jasonfoolio: Jan 7, 2008 1:58 am
wow. its very sad.
but very good.
good job.
Comment by UpAgainstTheWall: Jan 7, 2008 10:38 pm
So sad, but well written.
I really liked it.
Comment by aCrazyApe: Jan 9, 2008 11:30 am
Amazing
the flow was perfect
the rhymes perfect
And all round excellent poem!!
Kuddos
Comment by aqua4ever: Jan 12, 2008 1:58 pm
I dont really get it. Ive read it so many times and just now thought why havent i commented?? Its really good! i like it.
Comment by tobeloved: Jan 19, 2008 12:32 pm
it's really good, very sad, i was tearing up at the end,

vote up
Comment by tinkie: Jan 21, 2008 5:33 pm
i did guess the ending pretty quickly, but i was hoping i was wrong. beautiful poem. if this happened to you i am so sorry and cant even imagine how hard that would of been for you.
Comment by Devourthedarkness: Nov 30, 2008 12:11 pm
i actually cried..this is so sad..great job though..
Comment by virtualbubblewrap: Jan 23, 2008 5:42 am
Great poem
Comment by emily92: Jan 23, 2008 5:02 pm
ill add to your billion other comments, great job!!
Comment by cravingsoul: Jan 25, 2008 12:24 pm
i could cry!
Comment by tyrantCobain: Feb 2, 2008 7:24 pm
This is a ridicoulosy sad poem......great work though.
You've got a real touch for writing.
Comment by tigerlily: Feb 5, 2008 1:31 am
amazing. i was moved by this poem.
Comment by cryingblackblood: Feb 8, 2008 1:54 pm
this poem is amazing its just so powerful...did you think when you were writing it it would get 82 comments?
Comment by VanishedForever: Feb 12, 2008 9:11 pm
taht poem is so totally true.... i actually had tears in my eyes .. very heart touching... i am sorrie you went through that hun .. i hope things are better for you... hoep to see more of your stuff
Comment by babyboogt82886: Feb 19, 2008 9:45 am
very sad but well written! great work! Smiley
Comment by Manson666: Apr 21, 2008 6:54 am
thats realllllllllly good
Comment by shankielfc: Oct 20, 2008 1:18 pm
wow this is a wonderful poem well doneSmiley
Comment by Rocco: Mar 1, 2008 8:58 pm
wow - I'm sorry bro
Comment by meltedsnowman: Mar 10, 2008 9:08 am
im sry u had to go through so much pain. that really isnt fair at all.
Comment by Smitty: Mar 10, 2008 7:02 pm
im am also sorry of your pain. however, i do believe this has inspired you to write one of the most wonderful works of poetry ive ever seen! double kudos for u on this one
Comment by apollocrunk: Jul 27, 2008 2:56 pm
wow. that is good and sad.
Comment by deathmonkey: Mar 16, 2008 11:07 am
Just another message that gets across to everyone but the right people :/
Comment by truckergirl14: Mar 18, 2008 9:46 am
wowly comments
Comment by boosted: Mar 21, 2008 11:00 am
Wow- thats just... wow
Comment by RoSe: Mar 23, 2008 11:07 am
wow awesome poem. u r a great writer Smiley
Comment by XxXBleedingRosexXx: Mar 24, 2008 12:22 am
wwwwwwwwwwwwwow
lots of comments..
haha..

welll..
its good
wait not good

THE BEST!

sad....
....well written

hope 2 b as good as u
=]
Comment by JamStew: Mar 24, 2008 2:10 pm
So sad. I hope everything works out.
Comment by nich123: Mar 24, 2008 10:45 pm
awww =(
Comment by iloveyoubabyxo: Mar 25, 2008 11:03 am
wow your amazing at writing
but cheer up.
someone with talent
Shouldnt let anything get in its way
Comment by urabaka: Mar 26, 2008 11:27 am
Very strong, and very sad.
Comment by Maximus: Mar 27, 2008 5:45 pm
With those words you touched the bottom of my heart.
Comment by HeLovesMeNot: Apr 3, 2008 11:03 pm
soo sad, does she die, i want to know more!!
Comment by asdfyz: Apr 28, 2008 10:18 am
that is soooooo sad! I love that poem,
it is haunting tho. I finished and a shiver went down my spine.
Comment by SPAGACKULA: Apr 29, 2008 3:34 am
A True Love Poem Purely from the Heart and Soul.
Comment by emsue11392: May 2, 2008 10:30 am
really good!!!!!
keep writting!!!!
comment mine please!!!!!!!!
Comment by lifesucks: May 9, 2008 9:52 am
this is a really good poem i really like it a lot
Comment by lindseymarie: May 9, 2008 11:05 am
reallly gooood, but saad
Comment by zoe: May 10, 2008 6:30 pm
i liked it but still verey sad
Comment by zoe: May 10, 2008 6:38 pm
i liked it but still verey sad
Comment by Nickole: Jun 12, 2008 9:29 am
omg i was sittin in class when i read this and i started to cry and everyone looked at me like i was crazy...that was a sad poem
Comment by mzbrowneyez: Jun 13, 2008 2:37 pm
i have a pain in my heart just by reading this poem..it was so sad..but great
Comment by timewornsoul: Jun 28, 2008 1:08 pm
This has got to be the most touching poem Ive heard in a very long time. Fantastic piece of work. As a father I cant imagine losing my little girl. My heart goes out to you.
Comment by greybutterfly: Jun 29, 2008 8:11 am
very deep and strong

Comment by chinawhite: Jul 4, 2008 10:47 pm
This peom is beautifully and simply written.

Which is why it's a great peom because the meaning and emotion behind it isn't simple at all.

Wonderfully done.
Comment by emilymaria: Jul 9, 2008 12:25 am
oh god are you okay?i love the way your poem has such a simple rhyming pattern but is still so beautful you are a true artist of words
Comment by LightHearted: Jul 27, 2008 6:00 am
thats very beautiful and moving
Comment by Chengeli: Jul 11, 2008 7:47 pm
It's a very beautiful poem. It gives me chills - that's what poetry should be all about - deep emotions.
Comment by IrOcKmYoWnSoX: Jul 12, 2008 10:52 am
wow really good.. vote up =]
Comment by luckeyassassin: Jul 16, 2008 3:23 pm
beautiful ending
Comment by lotsofstuff321: Jul 19, 2008 11:46 am
Okay so i was reading the poem wonder why it was on the top of the list thinking this is pretty good..then i read the last bit and it's like so AH!! AWSOME!!!
Comment by clarity: Mar 5, 2009 6:32 am
An expression of love and adoration that really touched me. Sadness at its most intense.
Comment by altheamaraj: Aug 3, 2008 9:42 am
Sometime in 2005 i lost my twins, like you i have so many dreams for them, when im reading your piece its very good, in the last stanza you caught me. Great!!!
Comment by sunkissed04643: Aug 11, 2008 10:33 am
I'm so sorry for your loss. But you are a beautiful writer.
Comment by darksideofme: Aug 11, 2008 10:27 pm
I think I'm the only person on POQ who didn't comment on this. It really is a great poem. I'm dreadfully sorry for your loss. This is why I can't believe there is a god..... because things like this happen. Stay strong.
Comment by darkangel122: Aug 19, 2008 12:56 pm
I really like your poem. When I read the last line I alomost cried.
Comment by Grammij: Aug 22, 2008 11:23 am
The poem is a beautiful, very sad poem and I imagines that it was a personal experience for you froem the beginning of the poem and am so sorry. The only, small, critique that I have is that you were writing about your "still born" child and therefore it wasn't possible for her to be able to grow or cure( as they are future tense)I would have tried to relay the same parts as past tense.
Keep on creating, you have a wonderful mind!
Comment by fetatoo89: Aug 22, 2008 4:59 am
That is really, really beautiful.

It is one of the best poems i have read.
Comment by secretskeptinside: May 24, 2009 10:32 pm
that was really sad, but a good poem.
Comment by emochickforever: Sep 17, 2008 10:27 am
It's a heatrbeaking poem. But it was wonderful.
Comment by gorgeousimperfection: Sep 29, 2008 11:48 am
im speechless. this touched me in many ways. it was so sad but u put it into words perfectly.
Comment by LongxLost: Sep 30, 2008 6:14 pm
amazing, really beautiful
=]
Comment by chaos128: Aug 4, 2009 8:03 am
Brief, poignant and to the point; an ideal example of the expression, less is more.
Comment by cutiepie: Oct 16, 2008 10:28 am
omg, this is such a sad poem, i am so sorry for u loss, i'm sure she would have been a really great and beautiful person, keep ur chin up, fabulous poem.Smiley
Comment by anonymouswriter: Nov 6, 2009 11:31 pm
Very beautiful! in a way where you can turn that sadness into something so amazingOpen smile my heart goes out to you! Keep writing!
Comment by vannabugg: Oct 27, 2008 3:49 pm
awww, i love your poem and im sorry for your loss...
Comment by jordan24: Oct 30, 2008 4:59 pm
That is sad. You are a great writer though, I can tell your poems MEAN something. Keep writing.
Comment by ArcAngel: Nov 5, 2008 4:40 pm
Incredible poem!!!
it so beautiful and i admire the way you wrote this poem.

there is no doubt that it is a favorite!!!
Comment by Clvisugo: Nov 7, 2008 8:44 pm
What a beautiful, amazing poem! I know you wrote it a while back, but I have just come across it!

I know exactly how you felt (and still probably feel) I had a neice who was born sleeping - I think it was one of the hardest losses I've had to deal with because for months I imagined what she'd be like and if she'd be like my little girl, and I only got to spend a few precious moments with her. I still imagine what she'd be like now 3 1/2 years on!

Thankyou for sharing!
Comment by softrain: Nov 10, 2008 4:12 pm
That was amazing, so much was put into those words, speechless, it really is beautifully sad.
Comment by littleford94: Nov 27, 2008 1:31 am
very touching, really expressive...
Comment by LifeIsIronic: Nov 16, 2008 10:41 am
Gave me chills Open smile ..
Comment by snowdream: Nov 17, 2008 7:38 pm
tears in eyes .... very touching
Comment by jygztur: Nov 22, 2008 6:03 am
oh
how sad
Comment by J3SI: Nov 21, 2008 1:55 pm
This poem sent chills down my spine
Its beautiful yet depressing
I love it
Comment by chaos128: Aug 4, 2009 8:02 am
Brief, poignant and to the point; an ideal example of the expression, less is more.
Comment by IrfanAli: Nov 26, 2008 1:24 am
a good way to express your feelings
Comment by DarkCobra: Nov 28, 2008 10:16 pm
sad, sad, sad! but great!!!
Comment by AiEnma: Nov 28, 2008 11:37 pm
aw how cute but sad i love it
Comment by angelheart16: Dec 3, 2008 8:10 pm
this poem is sad, but i have hope for the baby, its sad that she never has a chance
Comment by Haylo: Dec 17, 2008 2:08 pm
this is good. its got soul. Keep writing!
Comment by monkeyboy2416: Dec 18, 2008 3:20 pm
I guess i came to this a little late.
I wont repeat what everybody else has put, i'll just say, its obvious why my comment is number 153.
Brilliant.
Comment by DarkCobra: Dec 18, 2008 11:43 pm
That was brilliance in a poem. Wait I've already commented o.o
Comment by XimTheLost: Dec 25, 2008 7:39 pm
SAD
Comment by livelife: Jan 1, 2009 6:23 pm
Verry Sorry, but very interesting poem. caught me by surpise.
Comment by Shortie14: Jan 1, 2009 11:07 pm
i like ie....but sad
Comment by LightestShadow: Jan 3, 2009 4:36 pm
it's sad, but beautiful, it's a perfect peice of art and work that truley means something...!
Comment by LightestShadow: Jan 3, 2009 4:43 pm
u are a talented person with such vision, i voted up! this was the BEST one i hav seen all day! i feel sorry for you, but im just glad you shared it, it is truly amazing! it touched me and a lot of people, i want to be as good as u!
Comment by yhureii: Jan 9, 2009 12:56 pm
u should continue writing. . very talented.. this gave me goosebumps. .
Comment by Angel: Jan 13, 2009 4:03 pm
very good i didnt say the endding coming. great job.
Comment by SexyMunchkin: Jan 19, 2009 3:32 am
My heart goes out to you... the poem is so beautiful but written for such a harsh reason... Best i've read in a long time xxx
Comment by EmperorMosta: Jan 22, 2009 1:05 pm
I liked it a lot.
Comment by FallenAngel369: May 1, 2009 7:45 pm
this is so sad but a really good poem
Comment by secretpoet89: Jan 24, 2009 10:28 pm
this peom has a lot of heart and even more feeling. I really like it, and i hope that you keep writing poetry like this.
Comment by lionxxlamb: Jan 28, 2009 7:59 pm
That is amazing and very sad. It'd be horrible to have a stillborn....very touching...
Keep writing.
Comment by grunty: Jan 29, 2009 11:55 am
beautifully sad
Comment by k22: Jan 31, 2009 9:08 pm
beautifully written and very sad. i hope it's not from personal experience.
Comment by Quietman: Feb 6, 2009 10:56 am
Powerfull ending, sad but from the heart <3
Comment by angeloflove: Feb 7, 2009 3:47 pm
Indeed tragic at the end, It breaks the heart. But lovely poem.Also very nicely written.
Keep writing more poems that touch the heart. As this one has touched me dearly.
Comment by LightestShadow: Feb 8, 2009 10:23 am
I am so sorry, I'm glad you shared it, it's so tragic and touching all at the same time...! Keep writing though, you're very good at it.
Comment by kendaray: Feb 8, 2009 1:18 pm
wow thats really sad Sad face Good Poem Though Smiley
Comment by NiceGuysLoveBetter: Feb 10, 2009 1:08 pm
Haven't read this in a while...It truly is the most powerful poem i've ever seen in a book or the internet.
Amazing.
Comment by NiceGuysLoveBetter: Feb 10, 2009 1:08 pm
Read it again, and still the same impact on my emotion.

I can't believe it.
Comment by flippinthrulife17: Feb 10, 2009 9:43 pm
i got goosebumps so bad. but i loved it. so sad. Sad face
Comment by 900240040: Mar 9, 2009 1:01 pm
awwwwww. thats sad. but it was very powerful. it was well written
Comment by despedida: Sep 7, 2009 1:31 am
This hurts, this is visceral.
Comment by SimplyB: Feb 18, 2009 5:20 pm
wow, truly touching.
Comment by viv: Feb 25, 2009 3:21 pm
good luck.
it's beautiful,
Comment by myheartisbroken321: Feb 24, 2009 11:41 pm
Yea, well done for most points Open smile
Comment by anotherperson: Feb 26, 2009 7:40 am
very nice ;) beautiful
keep writing!
Comment by heartbrokengirl1988: Mar 6, 2009 11:34 am
luv this poem. Smiley
Comment by Lenore: Jul 21, 2009 8:56 pm
wow...so beautiful!
Comment by Vix: Mar 23, 2009 1:33 am
This poem is great, really sad but great. I liked how you wrote it, well done Smiley
Comment by SilentBeauty: Mar 25, 2009 6:00 pm
the words for this poem are beautiful i dont know how you found them but you managed to make something great about them i love it, the sadness is so overwhelming but that is what makes this poem so special
Comment by virajvkc: Mar 27, 2009 1:06 am
beautiful... truly amazing... very few poems have had such a profound effect on me... its overpowering...

i can't even describe in words how amazingly deep and emotional these few lines are...
Comment by Samie: Mar 27, 2009 1:45 am
I was smiling so much at the compassion and visions about nothing but the best for this new lil life, and than to know that she never got to see or do any of these things made me cry. It made me relise how lucky i am Smiley
Comment by tealtear: Mar 31, 2009 7:45 pm
I really enjoyed reading this poem. The last sentence is so shocking and a little twisted, but this poem truely exposes your raw passion and emotion. Excellent job.
Comment by Tinkerbellpixie: Apr 2, 2009 1:43 pm
I am definitely really late on this poem.
It is really great. There is a reason I am comment number 187.
Comment by JamesR: Apr 4, 2009 6:48 pm
188? Far out...nice poem, very powerful
Comment by christinaxxnguyen: Apr 11, 2009 1:28 pm
It's amazing (:
Comment by Luv4shelly: Apr 19, 2009 3:14 pm
now i understand why this has the most points, it is breath taking and it makes people cry b/c there is almost nothing worse than seeing such a small, innocent person lose their life before they even get to live it.
Comment by Luv4shelly: Apr 19, 2009 3:18 pm
wow, now I understand why this poem has highest points. it is breath taking and it makes people cry b/c there is nothing worse than seeing a s,all, innocent person lose their life even before they get to live it.
Comment by Luv4shelly: Apr 19, 2009 3:15 pm
now i understand why this has the most points, it is breath taking and it makes people cry b/c there is almost nothing worse than seeing such a small, innocent person lose their life before they even get to live it.
Comment by freexpression: Apr 8, 2009 9:16 am
nice one i love it
Comment by Shortie14: Apr 14, 2009 7:49 pm
nice one i love it
Comment by neverinlove: Apr 15, 2009 1:11 pm
wow love this so powerful great job
Comment by Heartbroken120: Jun 29, 2009 5:13 pm
amazing :] *votes up*
Comment by LilyFrejahX: Apr 17, 2009 3:06 pm
i am trulii amazed at this poem it touches deep.. realii realii good amazing realii i alwais liked touching poems but this doesnt touch it goes deeper then that ... great poem =)
Comment by lawbound22: Apr 18, 2009 2:55 am
#194. wow. un freakin believable. I want to go home and hold my little girl. touching on so many different levels. by far best saddest poem i have read yet. thank you for a glimpse into poetic beauty.
Comment by lawbound22: Apr 18, 2009 2:55 am
#194. wow. un freakin believable. I want to go home and hold my little girl. touching on so many different levels. by far best saddest poem i have read yet. thank you for a glimpse into poetic beauty.
Comment by nana2195: Apr 21, 2009 6:07 pm
wow i mean i may be just a kid but i have a little sister and a god brother and sister and they are like the world to me. this reminds me of my god sister she is so amazing. i hope that when she gets older she is inspired and encouraged to do all those things. god bless you.
Comment by solonely: Apr 21, 2009 8:42 pm
this is so sad it brung tears to my eyes and you hve written this so beautifully truely amazing poem.
Comment by solonely: Apr 21, 2009 8:43 pm
this is so sad it brung tears to my eyes and you hve written this so beautifully truely amazing poem.
Comment by LostInDarkness: Apr 22, 2009 6:31 am
great poem! i really love the wording! keep it up!
Voted Up!
Comment by 4gottenchild: Apr 26, 2009 1:36 pm
omg that is so sad!!! i'm balling my eyes out right now!!! i love this poem!!
Comment by darkshinobi: Apr 30, 2009 8:02 am
good poem!! i really like it!! it shows the heart of the writer!!
Comment by sadseas: May 2, 2009 6:39 pm
Aww I loved your pome it was truly amazing.
Comment by miusha: May 4, 2009 11:40 am
som of my 7 month old and to read such a popem of great choice in words made my heart ache with such pain in my chest as my face gto the fellign that i'm about to cry in public b/c of a poem but i hold it in. i love this poem......i want more yet i hope it won't be sad. best of my wishes to you. i hope it don't happen to me since right nowi am in that position as of today.....Sad face
Comment by miusha: May 4, 2009 11:41 am
son of my 7 month old and to read such a popem of great choice in words made my heart ache with such pain in my chest as my face gto the felling that i'm about to cry in public b/c of a poem but i hold it in. i love this poem......i want more yet i hope it won't be sad. best of my wishes to you. i hope it don't happen to me since right nowi am in that position as of today.....
Comment by TeffaTheVampireGoddess: Aug 29, 2009 10:56 pm
I think I died a little inside at how beautifully sad this story is.
If I had to live through the life of who created this work of art, i'd have already killed myself. That is how much I don't understand.
Comment by rhczar: May 7, 2009 6:02 am
wow it really had an affect on me great poem. i hope you can write more poems. with such bauty
Comment by blondie22: May 8, 2009 8:37 am
aww very cute
Comment by ruokmiss: May 9, 2009 9:11 am
wow, the end caught me off guard, very sad
Comment by ninasworld: Aug 28, 2009 8:18 am
this is a very great poem. hopefully this can happen one day..but only the part that says

She will grow to be a success at everything she does,
She will never be a quitter or a failure like I was.

She will cure many diseases and help the cause for world peace,
She will see to stopping violence and that world hunger cease.

this is a really wonderful poem
Comment by thatperson: May 12, 2009 6:47 pm
oh my that is an amazing poem the end was sad and I trembled
Comment by patto27: May 13, 2009 3:26 am
thats sad as
good poem
Comment by MrsPerez: May 14, 2009 1:21 pm
This is a pretty sad poem, if I wasn't in class I would've cried.
Comment by burningxxxangel: Jul 6, 2009 11:03 pm
nice poem
Comment by Angelsvoice: Jun 6, 2009 4:26 pm
truly...truly beautiful. i dont think i could ever live through something like that.
Comment by christinababe903: Jun 6, 2009 6:06 pm
good poem
Comment by ScarsRemain: Jun 7, 2009 1:28 am
wow little words , but expressed beautifully(:
Comment by Shelo: Jul 1, 2009 3:44 am
I didn't see that coming either..Vote up!
Comment by PenandPaper: Jul 12, 2009 12:16 am
i loved it.
sad yet good.
Comment by heartbreakbny: Jul 23, 2009 8:39 am
nice poem
such a sad ending
Comment by NixNi: Jul 24, 2009 11:45 pm
o my gosh. im so sry. wonderful and heartfelt poem tho. my best wishes
Comment by vonsweeny: Aug 5, 2009 10:21 am
i really love this, its so simple and im very sorry i cant imagine how that felt
Comment by IrisLee: Aug 9, 2009 1:02 pm
Awwww, I am so sorry; that is awful! It must be hell to lose a child. I am here if you need to talk
Comment by howdyyy: Aug 11, 2009 2:50 pm
This is so beautiful. So emotional, so real, such art.
Comment by azeezoluwa: Aug 12, 2009 1:22 pm
Simple and sad
Comment by LunaGetsuna: Aug 14, 2009 11:23 am
I am so sorry, but if it is any consolation, this is a beautiful poem written by an author with true talent.
Comment by ajuggalettenamedalex: Sep 8, 2009 10:32 am
very nice poem, sad but that's life. i know how you feel, it hurts a lot but you'll get through it. All the best to you.
Comment by XxInsanebeautixX: Sep 10, 2009 10:05 pm
Wow this made me cry. I have a son and I jus had my baby girl. If this is true I'm so sorry I can only imagine the pain.its says so much in jus a few words.god bless you
Comment by sion: Sep 13, 2009 12:22 pm
the end made me choke up...truly sorry for your loss
Comment by justanotherperson: Sep 14, 2009 12:55 pm
woah....tht was just wow, this poem touched my heart..no words can be said..just totally awesome and sad at the same time
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Sep 15, 2009 11:09 am
I have nothing to say that has not already been said, so i'll add my comment to the hundreds already here and wipe a tear from my eye. I cant imagine what it would be like to feel like that, but I can say you made me feel a sadness that I havent felt in a long time.
This truly is a poem.
Comment by NikisNightmare: Sep 23, 2009 7:33 am
it seriously brought tears to my eyes. i'm crying now. she never even had a chance. my herat goes out to you and yours and i will add my comment to the hundreds of other people who also have a heart for you.
Comment by Shadowspider48: Oct 1, 2009 10:01 pm
I see why it has most votes now lol.Wonderful poem,wonderful love.She'll no doubt have a wonderful life.
Comment by courtneytland: Oct 2, 2009 7:26 am
your not alone i kinda kno wat ur going thru i had a misscarridge when i was 2months pregnant
Comment by charlotte897: Nov 8, 2009 4:51 am
wow i really like it keep writing poems you have a talent for it you do
Comment by Oriana: Oct 11, 2009 8:11 pm
That poem was so full of emotion that even though I've never even thought of such things, I still connected to it.
Comment by crannjoankeel: Oct 13, 2009 6:27 pm
Brilliant Flow
Comment by esportslover18: Oct 15, 2009 12:05 pm
that was such an amazing and powerful poem. it brought tears to my eyes.
Comment by DarkFireLightRain: Oct 26, 2009 8:53 pm
So sad... so beautiful but in a very sad way.
Comment by cupcake: Nov 2, 2009 9:38 am
this is so sad...
Comment by Springbok: Nov 5, 2009 8:52 am
very nice
Comment by meltedsnowman: Nov 5, 2009 8:27 pm
3 years later-- and its goin up to 151 comments.... this still made me cry.
Comment by mybeloved: Nov 5, 2009 8:41 pm
this is just like..oh my god.. Sad face im so sorry.
Comment by hutwohl58: Nov 7, 2009 10:55 am
Having five children,two of which were born very premature,almost losing one,I am sorry. I am sorry that youll never get to see your child grow. I am soo glad my Sarah with tubes sticking out of her body for two months made. I hope youve had children since.
Comment by envyandpride: Nov 11, 2009 7:18 pm
beautiful, just plain beautiful.
Comment by NonyaBiznazz: Nov 18, 2009 4:39 pm
Heartbreaking. I'm sorry-- truly.

As for the poem, not only did I feel it but I liked the contradiction and the flow.
Comment by JenLom4: Nov 15, 2009 11:29 pm
This is a very touching poem, wonderful job.
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