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So true. I myself don't believe in love.

But the feeling I get from this poem is that you still do. ;)

It's ok.

im stuck there i so agree
its good to have you back

Okay, so you want to be critiqued? First off, it's a really good poem. The whole concept is amazingly put. I think the only thing is the first line of the second stanza. "Blinded by love you can never see what your love truly is." It's a great statement, but it doesn't fit in as well with the rest of the stanza, where you talk about the sacrifices you make. You should develop the idea of being so in love that you can't identify what it truly is, because it's a very poetic concept. Maybe make it into a whole new stanza...? It's such a good thought that you could really add to it and improve an already amazing poem. So there's your critique...hope it's what you wanted. GREAT poem!

thank you for your comment fade and everyone else i will put my brain to work and really improve my poem at least the second stanza