Imperfect Perfection

I think that after you hear the background then it is much more sad rather then the deep the poem in itself is going for.

very good

Thats just pure perfection. You are a great poet.
The world could use more you.

SO sad and angry, theres so many emotions put into this poem but yet it comes out so beautiful i love it

I picked up the paper today and saw a mention of an article they did months ago when a young girl committed suicide by jumping in front of a train.
It was the day after the national exam results came out and she had done extremely well in them all and she seemed happy so nobody expected her to do what she done. It turns out that even though she seemed to have a perfect life her parents dictated it and she lived the dreams they wanted not her own. She was incredibly intelligent and they wanted her to become a doctor (so they could boast basically) as it is one of the most difficult university courses to get into over here. Nobody ever took into consideration what she wanted and look what happened. A wasted life.

That's why I wrote this poem. In a way its a tribute to her and all those like her. I only wish it was better.

very deep, after hearing the background it seems sad versus deeper

voting up, well thought through and very fluent, well done
~ perry

i'm italian, and obviously i can't catch the sound of this yours, but i really liked some lines

great poem, well done

yes... i can relate to this feeling... the mask can so easily shatter our true faces and our hearts... however one should always fight to be themselves... and yet... something so simple is so very difficult... how tragic... well written... as usual, mon ami.

You know...I have always told my kids that they can be whatever they want. Just make sure you study hard and keep your grades up. And be how you want to be.

No pressure...er..except the grades that is.

I hear these pushy parent prattling about their wonderkinders and I always feel sorry for the kids. Of course they are sublimating their own sense of failure into desire for their kids to do well. The lack of self awareness is staggering.

Well done.

There is a huge problem in Japan with teen suicide, which is due (they say) to pressure placed on the kids to do well.

Wouldn't know myself though, i've never taken a test in my life.

this is really beautiful and i can really relate to your poem, im glad i found it. this is the first poem i read on this site and im really glad i did, thank you

what an excellent tribute! very well written!

Well grades are easy to keep up even if you only put in about an hours study a day...its the expectation of 100% that drives some kids over the edge. And its sad when it happens

Sad.
Angry.
Gut wrenching.
True.

Beautiful tribute, I loved this one.
Never stop writing

Wow, that was so sad. It was amazingly sad. Unfortunately a lot of people are expected to be perfect and parents just don't understand how hard it is for us.

OMG! this is soooooo amazing! I love this! GREAT GREAT job!

Oh My Gosh i feel exactly the same way. 'cept im a guy.

Wow, I love this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's absolutely gorgeous!!!! So powerful, especially with the story behind it. =( I can't even imagine. I don't understand how people could do this to their very own children. Just a legal form of abuse, but often with the same affect. *sigh*
Beautiful poetry!

very good ( sry about not adding much, but i needed just 1 more points so i could post a poem of my own hehe)

this is really powerful

great poem liked the continuos rythm in the first 6 lines

My parents always have the idea of a perfect child and thats why sometimes i feel like the smallest things i do they blow out of perportion...i hate when they think im perfect and this poem is exactly how i feel

Amazing..completly amzing

It's amazing I love it. *votes up*

I think you did a perfect job. Good Work!!