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Unwritten

Unwrite me,
For I am already condemned.
My life mapped out,
On each unforgiving page.
And each year that passes
One will crumble to dust.

Unwrite me,
I long for a second chance,
To look forwards instead of backwards.
As the steady tick tock of time goes by
Still the pendulum with your eraser,
As you still my future.

Unwrite me,
As you sit motionless at your desk, pen poised,
Spare me a thought,
I like to think that fate is written in pencil.
It gives me something to fight for:
The possibility of a second chance.

Unwrite me,
For only you can do so,
You are my last chance and
I have been good this year,
Or,
If the future is written in pen,
Then tear each page slowly up
And write me again.

by beautifuldisaster
posted on 09/28/2009

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Comment by MemoirsOfZidane: Oct 1, 2009 3:57 am
That my dear is supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!
Comment by jimbo85: Oct 2, 2009 1:01 pm
i like it
Comment by clinxi: Oct 2, 2009 5:06 am
i love this poem

Unwrite me,
As you sit motionless at your desk, pen poised,
Spare me a thought,
I like to think that fate is written in pencil.
It gives me something to fight for:
The possibility of a second chance.
i love that part i read it over and over again i just absolutly love this part
Comment by sharon123: Sep 30, 2009 7:23 pm
AMAZING
Comment by NiceGirlsDontWin: Sep 28, 2009 4:54 pm
Dood i flippin love this poem! u did an awesome job! keep goin!
Comment by grunty: Sep 28, 2009 5:23 pm
This is a great poem. I love the theme and the way you put it all together.

But it makes me wonder. Aren't you about to get married?
Not have second thoughts are we? lol!
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Sep 28, 2009 5:15 pm
I wrote this in about 5 minutes.. I have no idea what was going through my head but whatever it was, this is what came out of it. Its actually one of the few that I've written that I actually like.
Comment by Telemachus: Sep 28, 2009 7:00 pm
Very fine - great idea. Reminds me of the Paul Kelly song "If I could start this day again". I love such whimsical, ennui-sprinkled ideas - and this is one of the best.

Just a baby typo: As you sit at motionless at your desk
Comment by mightymouse: Sep 28, 2009 7:07 pm
wow i didn't realize it, but i made a poem with your name! woah, subliminal messaging...

anyways, great write!
But have you ever thought of writing in pen? haha

as xHurricane said, "Write on!"
Comment by BuriedDeepAsICanDig: Sep 28, 2009 5:59 pm
that left me speechless, in the most beautiful way.
Comment by Poetryinmotion: Sep 28, 2009 5:28 pm
dayum this poem is pretty noice.
Comment by PrettyOdd: Sep 28, 2009 7:39 pm
This is definitely a beautiful poem.

"I like to think that fate is written in pencil.
It gives me something to fight for:
The possibility of a second chance."

I like to think that exact same thing.
Comment by Slain: Sep 28, 2009 8:03 pm
this is awe-some! you really got talent
Comment by Tinkerbellpixie: Sep 29, 2009 5:54 am
Unwrite me,
"As you sit motionless at your desk, pen poised,
Spare me a thought,
I like to think that fate is written in pencil.
It gives me something to fight for:
The possibility of a second chance.
...

Or,
If the future is written in pen,
Then tear each page slowly up
And write me again."

I absolutely love this poem. Wonderful, wonderful job!
Comment by REDSOXFAN09: Sep 28, 2009 5:24 pm
this is really good i really like it i want to hear more from you. =]]
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Sep 29, 2009 2:03 am
Thanks guys..

And no Grunty... I am most definitely NOT having second thoughts!!
I was just scribbling rhymes on a piece of paper and then suddenly that idea came into my head so I wrote it.
Comment by darknessofcrows: Sep 29, 2009 8:12 am
Hmmmmmnnnn.... i like this.... i like this alot.... it has a sparse randomness... you only continue to improve... very well done...
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Sep 30, 2009 10:03 am
Thanks monkey!
Now now... lets not start calling people names Sticking tongue out
Comment by monkeyboy2416: Sep 30, 2009 1:13 am
Ooooh, this is bloody good!
(I wasn't supposed to sound suprised there)

You lass are a poet born.
(5 minutes? Cow...)
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Sep 29, 2009 2:09 am
oh and thanks for the heads up Telemachus! I just fixed it there
Comment by Xenoz: Oct 3, 2009 8:46 am
Hm, I definitely like this, very cool idea!
And the final stanza is just great.=)
Comment by Childproof: Oct 4, 2009 8:36 am
Raas! It took me longer than 5mins to read it!
Comment by LKR: Oct 4, 2009 8:54 pm
i really liked this. =P
Comment by Throwinguprainbo: Nov 11, 2009 8:29 am
WOW. I wish I could write like you. I sound like a baby compared to you. *jealous* but -votes up-
Smiley
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