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Mechanics

The brave one sleeps, with her head upon the side steps.
For she wakens with a weap, as she feasts the kingdom's dinner heap.
St. Catherine rings them bells, to summon us and pay our dept.
We sing and we praise and pray,
I for a drink and she the same,
But only one shall quench.

Living daily life in each corner of Main,
Outside where I shop for champagne.
Towers I climb by mechanics,
Pits she falls by economics.
Up or down,
We both snort the same air.
For then, is all evermore fair.

When the dark night descends, do my lights brighten.
While her's dim, by the morning news over her head.
Bliss drowns me in my dream,
While she wishes to fall deep in the stream.

by Bourne
posted on 04/30/2008

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Comment by Thorne: May 1, 2008 11:20 am
I like the poem also but there are a few changes I would consider. First, I think in the second line you mean "weep" and not "weap".

In the 2nd to last line of the 2nd stanza, the word snort throws me off a little. It feels almost violent while the rest of the poem is somewhat royal and grand.
Comment by kayla: May 1, 2008 2:29 am
Great poem, really well written. Vote upSmiley
Comment by cryingblackblood: May 1, 2008 12:54 pm
great poem, i don't agree with thorne, your poem is yours and you should keep it that way
Comment by tearsofrain: May 1, 2008 1:56 pm
i like the snort actaully. i think it shows the disgust you feel for the two circumstances.
this is a bummer =P but a very well written bummer ^.^
Comment by lbrnware: May 1, 2008 2:55 pm
I actually really like your style of writing. Its really different.
Comment by oceanreverie: May 1, 2008 5:20 pm
hey, i havent been on in awhile, (site wasnt working)so i have a lot of reading to catch up on with your poems. i (as you know) agree with lbrnware, i love your style, its very different, and so sincere and powerful, well done
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