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moonlit hills

mouth closed and breathing through my nose i climb yet another hill rising above me like all the others i have climbed
and passed over into new realms of being, seeing and thinking and feeling the world and the people around me who i
know and don't know or may one day know but do not know now and i wonder what is beyond this hill and what will the
next hill be and how high will it be and will i be strong enough to climb it too like i have climbed all the others
during day or night while sun or moon or both hang above me timeless in their drifting through space while my life runs
its course and i run my race over these hills to the other side and beyond with my mouth
closed and breathing through my nose.... quietly while you were asleep....

by floating
posted on 02/03/2008

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Comment by NicholasScott: Feb 3, 2008 10:13 pm
this is a good poem... but i think u should make the lines shorter and maybe if it is long enough break it up into stanzas... great poem thoughSmileySmileySmileySmileySmileySmileySmiley
Comment by floating: Feb 4, 2008 12:00 am
I wuz flowing......so the format was stream of consciousness with minimal intervention modification. Most of poems are 'single takes'. I rarely revise and re-write. Maybe I should! LOL!
Comment by missingmom: Feb 4, 2008 7:05 am
No way! I would advise you change nothing, just keep living the dream the way it's written! Voting up! Smiley
Comment by kayla: Feb 4, 2008 12:46 pm
I love the way its written...Brilliant poem!
Comment by footprints: Feb 5, 2008 9:17 pm
Love the thought stream flow Smiley The moon is terrific; timeless, eternal and peaceful. We seem to be on the same wavelength writing about it (full moons can be inspiring). Beautiful.. poem. Thanks for sharing.
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