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Happenings
What happens when life doesn’t?
Cold whispers,
my lips, authors,
of still born requests
That shameful walk,
treading through another
debilitating winter
What happens when God doesn’t?
The earth sleeps
under me-
above me,
an off white gray
that coats the saved.
I remain clear
Life, was only the labeled ingredients
on the wrong side of an empty bottle
God, was only a silent gesture in the
noise of a crowded room
by SilentWords
posted on 11/03/2009
Cold whispers,
my lips, authors,
of still born requests
That shameful walk,
treading through another
debilitating winter
What happens when God doesn’t?
The earth sleeps
under me-
above me,
an off white gray
that coats the saved.
I remain clear
Life, was only the labeled ingredients
on the wrong side of an empty bottle
God, was only a silent gesture in the
noise of a crowded room
by SilentWords
posted on 11/03/2009
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Comment by grunty: Nov 4, 2009 9:15 am
God, was only a silent gesture in the
noise of a crowded room
Wow...that is powerful!
Great write.
Such eloquence.
Comment by fanpirewerevocate: Nov 4, 2009 5:53 pm
woah.Comment by PrettyOdd: Nov 4, 2009 6:04 pm
"What happens when life doesn’t?"
You really caught my attention with that.
"The earth sleeps
under me-
above me,
an off white gray
that coats the saved.
I remain clear"
I think that is both brilliant and beautiful.
Comment by google: Nov 5, 2009 7:40 am
enjoyable read.
I like how the questions are asked,
maybe remove "only" from the second and fourth last lines. seems too editorial to the reader. just a suggestion.
Comment by Telemachus: Nov 5, 2009 2:50 pm
Last 2 stanzas - mighty!
You know where I stand on this stuff...one day we will all see the joke - and we will not laugh.
Comment by itsme0405: Nov 6, 2009 10:08 am
awesome poem! very interesting as well.
and thank you for your comment =)
Comment by ObiJAh: Nov 7, 2009 4:15 pm
"Life, was only the labeled ingredients
on the wrong side of an empty bottle"
I spent a while thinking about that line
nice poem
Comment by Loveformusicandpoetry1790: Nov 9, 2009 1:35 pm
Very powerful, strong meaning.. very good work..*smiles*Comment by Nick1959: Nov 9, 2009 6:06 pm
"Life, was only the labeled ingredients
on the wrong side of an empty bottle"
ah we all seek to fill that bottle, it is so hard sometimes we gain ground to find that what we pour in is rotted and decayed.
if only life came with warning labels. but then with out mistakes and pain would we truely live.
The poem is once again amazing
your thoughts are very deep.
Nick
Comment by Atavist: Nov 17, 2009 7:11 pm
When you feel so deeply about life as a misused, misunderstood and mistreated reality, you may feel that the only thing is to write it down.But the clarity of your prose is so timeless that the questions posed to all become as individual as the people who read this, and in finding their own answers they will grow in appreciation of your writing.(wow I sound like a pretentious twat!!
You really had me from there.
"Life, was only the labeled ingredients
on the wrong side of an empty bottle"
That's a great line and I spent a few minutes thinking about it. Which just made it even greater!
Nice write!