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The rhythm of this is really awkward.
When I read it out loud to myself here's what I get.
"I don't need your false ENTHUSIASM
Can't stand the pain of your SARCASM"
And it's jsut really weird to read things like that because when single words are on their own line a lot of emphasis gets put on it and just completely kills a poem's rhythm. It works sometimes, but not if it's done every other word. It would really look and read a lot better if the words were actually attached to the line it's supposed to be read with.

But that's just what I think.

hmmm... not bad!