Kiss

aw that's awesome dude

oh forgot to say this:
i like the whole dr. suess style

hahaha
I didnt really see that but thanks
and interesting comment

Very good. And Im not just saying it because your a friend im saying it because its true. Keep up the good work. It held my attention and im adhd and i have a short attention span so it must mean something lol.

Oooh I like it, it's tingly...

yeah i like the way this flows the first four lines i was like *jaw drops* i can't believe it... so simple yet so brilliant... made me mad i didn't come up with those lines errr

yeah i wanna use the lines

find faith in the chaos


and/or


use my tears to wipe away the pain

of course it wouldn't really be about me but it's easier to write from that point of view yadadimean


maybe even

And in this broken heart you'll find
A thousand distant memories
Then soon you'll see and learn in time
As each one falls in silence


actually... i think i wanna write something like yours... it's so awesome and simple its f'ing sick dude!!! yeah so ima go... finish writing that speech i was supposed to finish yesterday and then try to write something half as good as this one! lol


SoL

very good, i like the short lines. explains a lot in so few words. great job.

OMG this is AMAZING!!!!
I LOVE IT!!!!
Aww this says so much in such a short length; that shows that you are a gifted poet...
Very well written Keep writing and take care
You have my vote

aw so cute and simple. wonderful. luv3 it <333

haha cute =]

it's simple very sweet

i like it. its awesome!

awww so cute. amazing, never felt that before.