The Lunar Moth

this is succhhhh a beautiful poem! great write, keep up the good work

Interesting and enjoyable. However, the poem lacks punctuation that seems necessary in several parts of it. True, poems can be written how the poet intends, but without punctuation (which you already use in other parts), some lines leading into others become run-on and impede the flow of reading. For example, "...the frail girl scooped the tiny creature up in her hands" (a comma, or preferably period, is needed after "hands"). Also, in the only quote in the poem, it begins on one line and continues on another. However, you use quotation marks in both parts of it, like "everything"/"will be alright....I promise". This is unnecessary unless the quotations were from two different people/things or interrupted. To correct it, simply remove the ending quotation from everything, and the beginning from the next line, so it reads "everything / be alright....I promise".

Overall, an interesting poem and topic. I really enjoy poems that are written in this fashion and tell a story (regardless of length or whether they rhyme). It's one of the closest forms of poetry that evokes personal experience or emotion as it can get. Good job.

I really enjoyed it. Jod job.