(I Ask) Why Me?

that's really amazing tatsu! nice song, i like it.

Great song, you can confide in me i'm good with secrets

wow..amazing
i really think this is awesome!

another great one.

*hugz back*

i love it

mhm

wow.
i love how you are questioning God. a lot of ppl are constantly wondering, "why me?" but i think you captured the emotion quite well.

great poem.
i don't know you that well, but if you ever want to talk about anything; i'll always listen.

Wow *stunned* I loved it. It gets the message to you clearly without over doing it. Well done, very nice.

Amazing, I can really feel the poem, great job =)

you have herd it many times before.. see above (lol) but you do have a true talent

oh wow this is a fantastic poem.
keep it up!
good job.!!

it's good voting up!

A song is like a poem with background noises while you read, so I'll critique it as such. The concept behind it is interesting in itself, and is definitely a valid point to write about in any situation; isolation confines everyone, thus anyone can relate. The repetition of "Why?" both emphasises the feeling of isolation and confusion in that the persona doesn't know what is occurring or that things are simply happening too quickly for the persona to comprehend them all. The repetition, however, does come to be a little... repetitive, and redundant. It seems as if right out of the end of the "Why?" in the first stanza, you begin with another "Why?" in the second, which begins to make it come to be too much. Again, I frown at the "'Cuz", but that's your decision to put it in rather than the complete word. Lines 16-20 are weak. Not that they're poorly written or the idea is bad, they're not. It seems, though, that the persona, summarised, says "This is too hard, it's (dare I say) impossible to even try, I want to end it all right now. Wait, no I don't, if I had someone else it would all be okay". It's brief, sudden, and contradictory. To put this short, the idea of the poem is not bad, we all write about isolation and all its forms, but while this poem starts with an interesting concept, it could delve deeper rather than simply saying "It's hard" and then contradicting itself in the end. Give the readers something to grasp on just HOW hard it is, and explain further just HOW having someone else would make it better, or rather WHY. Obviously this poem was written due to strong, or rather profound, feelings of something.. and I'm just suggesting transferring those emotions/thoughts into the poem itself and expanding it. It isn't bad, but it could be more than it is currently.

i really like it

I like how you involve God in this poem. So many times people with pain think that God doesn't exist, but the truth is, if God didn't exist would you even be thinking about him? The repitition of the phrase "why me" gives the effect of desperation...almost like you're begging someone to listen to you. I'm not a big fan of the "'cuz" thing, but I'm not one to tell you how to write your poetry. I've read many of your poems in the 2 days since i've joined this site and i haven't found one that i didn't like. I'll definately message you on Myspace.

this is so deep and beautiful. this is by far one of the best poems i've read on this site.

Beautiful poem but i dunno wat your beliefs are on God but i ask that same question all the time. There's a erason to everything that happens in our life we just might not know why. But god loves each and every one of us he doesn't cause pain sin causes pain. You may not believe wat i'm telling you but thats ok.

People often ask that question of themselves. I've done it myself. And honestly, I don't think there is an answer.

thougt you didn't believe in god o well good poem.

i like this poem. good job

Really great poem.
I love the flow of it ,x

Love it!