Swan Song

everyone writes poetry different!

Well, I have to admit that this is an awesome poem.

And finally!
Someone who doesn't get all deffensive when people make suggestions.

But realize you cant please everone.

I personally like the short poems but a lot of people like them longer.

Just make sure you like them.

Wonderful job!!

I really like this poem. It has a good feel to it; somewhat familiar. I think it parallels a style I use sometimes, when trying to stay vague, but get how I'm feeling across to the reader. P.S. Good description; the definition of a swan song made the poem much better for me!

i really think your poems should be a little longer and a bit more detailed good though keep writing

Yes I really liked this it was vague... but that was the point. Right?

If its vague the reader must decipher it in they're on way.
I liked it; very good.

Its not flawless but its good it has a lot of potential. detail I think would mess this particular poem up! I love it!

By the way I would love to get some feed back on my stuff so check it out if you want.

I honestly don't see how lots of details make a poem better. And length really isn't an issue with poetry. It only takes a few well placed words to make a poem great. Some of the best are only a few lines long.
If you get too detailed you can tend to take away from the whole thing.

"The plot lines are nothing new, recycled and repeated"
I think everyone goes through those moments. Nicely done.

More detail would help but other than that I really like it!

I understand the detail issue, and I appreciate the suggestions, it's those sort of critiques that make me a better writer. I'm in the process of writing a very detailed and longer poem. However in regards to this one, it is meant to be vague and very metaphoric. Perhaps I am often too vague when I attempt to make the reader think, however that was the object with this one.

Thank you again for the critiques.