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Running

I'm running far away, trying to escape from all the pain and suffering inside, trying to cover it up, so hard all i want to do is cry and cut i'm acting like i don't feel nothing looking down at my wrists seeing all the scars, i couldn't help myself then cut, deeper and deeper i cut more blood comes out i am surrounded by my own blood i'm laying in it curled up in a ball crying my eyes out, black mixing in with my blood can't even move a muscle, no one has found me, i am slowing dying i could no longer run from the pain, i say this with pride, goodbye

by dyinginside52
posted on 07/10/2008

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Comment by timewornsoul: Jul 10, 2008 12:47 pm
I have to agree with Fade. I dont know if this is just your style either but I was thinking that breaking it up would help people better understand whats going on. While I read it I felt like I was reading a passage from a book. Either way it was really good.
Comment by fade: Jul 10, 2008 12:15 pm
Wow. I've struggled with cutting. This is really good. If you maybe broke it up into lines or stanzas you could separated and clarify the different points...but that's just a thought, i dont know if this is just your style. Either way, very good. Smiley
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