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obvious

i've always hated
the stupid little critics
bitching constantly
about every little thing i do
i think
ive dealt with enough
criticism
my whole damn life
give me a break
just one little break
that is all i ask
i am
so sick
of being bind
to my fucking manners
to try
and please you
live up
to your pathetic expectations
well ive come
to the sad
sick
realization
that i am
so far from perfect
so far
from your little glassy eyed
plastic smile
pink ribboned girl
and i
can never
will never
be
what you want me
to be
i beg your pardon
that i am not
your definition
of original
of honest
of pure
of innocent
of whatever the hell else
i try
i tried
but obviously
that wasnt enough

by oceanreverie
posted on 10/15/2008

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Comment by fade: Oct 15, 2008 5:24 pm
Wow....very well done. The anger is almost radiating off my computer screne. I like how you used random bits of sarcasm...it fit wonderfully into the poem.

The whole "I beg your pardon..." thing was wonderful.

Very angry, but written incredibly well. I like the short lines, they really add to the poem.
Comment by AngelicallyBroken: Oct 15, 2008 5:08 pm
...wow there is alot of emotion in this one,such a good write!and yeah i understand where you're coming from when you say all this well in my own way...good poem.
Comment by darksideofme: Oct 15, 2008 5:39 pm
My mouse just burnt my fingers...... Angers heat flowing through the computer. Thanks for the 3rd degree burns.

Sticking tongue out
Comment by asdfyz: Oct 15, 2008 5:44 pm
I don't know where this one came from, but I'm always here is you want to talk baby. I hope this wasn't inspired by me. I know you're going through a period of ... change right now and it is important that I'm here for you like always. IF something is wrong, come talk to me, I want to be here for you, i want to make you feel happy. I never expect you to be "tied up to your manners". YOu can be adessa rae flack, whoever that is, however you want to act, any way you want to be, I want, because I love you.
Comment by PrettyOdd: Oct 15, 2008 6:16 pm
Wow. There's a lot of strong emotion in this, which I think is amazing. You shouldn't have to try to be anything but who you really are. Great job.
Comment by xJeskaDollx: Oct 15, 2008 6:43 pm
Very powerful. Sorry for whatever set you off, but it really resulted in something amazing... I loved it. Poem was angry and tinted with sadness. Don't be anything thats not you. I gave up trying to please people, its a dead end. Anyways spectactular job, be who you wanna be.
Comment by lostinpoetry: Oct 15, 2008 7:45 pm
Wow. I love this and really relate. Well done.
Comment by SilentWords: Oct 16, 2008 9:37 am
even...tho..i think i know why u wrote this...I like it, u can feel the anger, and i like the form. Good Job....
Comment by HeartlessAngel: Oct 16, 2008 10:31 am
Very good poem.
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