last breath

hmm. i like this one, it took a complete different twist at the end then i had expected when first reading it! i really like the flow and word choice as well, it is simple, yet has a lot of depth. keep up the wonderful work!

[and thank you for your comments!!!]

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i think this is really good!when i started reading it i wasn't sure what it was totally about.then towards the end i figured that it was sort of about a friend of yours who was hurting and you wwanted to take their pain away,and make it yours.that is just my take on...but really good job anyways!

I agree with oceanreverie in that it took a very different trail than what I had expected.

I'm sorry you feel like you want to die. Or at least, that's what I got from reading this. Sometimes we all have that feeling. That our next breath just isn't worth it. Especially after losing someone or something. Especially when they meant so much to us.

Even though we may feel like this, we usually keep going. It's in human nature to fight to live. No matter what, we do what it takes. Even if that means resorting to cannibalism.

So by you saying you wish that said person's last breath had been yours, causes worry for me.

If you find yourself getting at rope's end and you need help or someone to talk. Even if it's just needing someone to listen, contact me. Shadowofatreespirit@hotmail.com

umm, its not that i want to die... im actualy very happy with my life now. the idea just came to me randomly so i wrote it

but im glad you guys like it (:

You're good!