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Killing Me

You’ve been killing me for 13 years,
But I guess that doesn’t count as much,
Did you know you’re my biggest fear?
But you don’t care one touch.

You’ve been killing me for 13 years,
Do you understand how that feels?
Even if you didn’t know, you’d say sorry,
But still I wouldn’t heal.

You’ve been killing me for 13 years,
Although it feels like 50.
I’m all eaten up inside,
That’s your fault, not mine.

You’ve been killing me for 13 years,
I’d like to do the same to you,
But of course I can’t, I love you too much,
But I’ll most certainly always hate you

by becky123456789
posted on 06/23/2009

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Comment by supbuttercup: Jun 26, 2009 4:45 pm
oo def can relate! good jobb
Comment by NoMoreSorrow: Jun 23, 2009 7:40 pm
This is soooo good! Keep writing! I can really relate=)
Comment by kazedragon: Jun 27, 2009 9:01 pm
WOW. I feel like this a lot, I love the way you put it. ^^
Comment by crumbsonthetable: Jun 26, 2009 1:00 pm
This is pretty good apart from the structure of your rhyming. I like it though.
Comment by ThaDeadRose: Jun 25, 2009 6:34 pm
ii know how you feel gurl...
Comment by SilentBeauty: Jun 25, 2009 10:37 am
i relate to this so well this poem is amazing, i love your writing keep it up
Comment by CrAzYsTaR: Jun 23, 2009 10:06 am
WOW ..I AM TEISTED...DO U LOVE HIM OR DO U HATE HIM..LOVE THE POEM..AND THE ENDING TO
Comment by CrimsonHeart: Jun 23, 2009 12:14 pm
I am confused!?!?!?! Great poem keep it up Smiley
Comment by TheInnerFreak: Jun 23, 2009 12:55 pm
NICE!
Really like this
Comment by EhWell: Jun 24, 2009 12:09 am
I love the repetition that is used in the first line of each stanza. I can even relate in some ways. One critique though, I'm confused by your use of rhyme. In the first stanza you have a clear ABAB rhyme scheme, then it starts to get fuzzy and finally disappears completely. However I'll give you the benefit of creative freedom... Wonderful poem overall, I would have just liked to see a more effective use of rhyming.

Check out my poetry when you get the chance, I really need some good criticism.
Comment by satif009: Jul 1, 2009 10:26 am
its very nice, touchyy
Comment by draydanljr: Jul 3, 2009 11:12 pm
very good try rearranging the structure a bit to improve ryming and rithm but the tone is outstanding
Comment by glittergirl: Jul 8, 2009 4:33 am
wow i love this poem sounds a bit like me Smiley
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