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Forgiveness Dies

Silent is the sound of the voice with the cut throat,
The steady pitter patter of rain on the window
Compliments the grotesque dripping of blood and water
From fingertips recently grown cold.

Effortless happy whistling resounds off the walls,
The aftermath perhaps, to an orchestra of destruction.
Never dreaming that a postmortem of evidence
Could shatter solid security of hidden truths.

A visitor unknowingly invited treads heavily here,
The silent footsteps drown out the undrawn breath.
Movements of forgetfulness in triumph are ended
A fearful sense of dreaded awareness
"who's there?"

Shrug off the superstitions to laugh
And clean up the monstrous mess
Yet though the abandoned shell is left behind,

The ghost lives on,
And forgiveness dies.

by beautifuldisaster
posted on 10/01/2009

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Comment by Snoman: Oct 2, 2009 1:40 am
whew.... thank god it thursday instead of monday huh beautiful ;)
lol
it certainly was dark... I enjoyed it Smiley
Comment by poemwrittingpipsqueek: Oct 1, 2009 1:46 pm
humm...well it truly is dark.
Comment by grunty: Oct 1, 2009 1:16 pm
OK, you are not allowed near the kitchen knives anymore.

Dark and creepy.
Comment by ajuggalettenamedalex: Oct 1, 2009 10:15 am
The begining was really good, my mouth dropped. very nice dark poem
Comment by niallhybris: Oct 1, 2009 8:42 am
wow. really well written. i like it
Comment by chiwa: Oct 1, 2009 9:54 am
i like this a lot. the point of view makes it very interesting.
Comment by emely: Oct 1, 2009 8:33 am
well, it's certainly dark.
Comment by SaaraLawliet: Oct 15, 2009 9:59 am
wow..this is great
Comment by jimbo85: Oct 2, 2009 12:43 pm
very good. nice job
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Oct 1, 2009 3:30 pm
But I like the knives......
Comment by monkeyboy2416: Oct 1, 2009 6:46 pm
Yes yes, we all like the knives.

Now put down that victim and go straight to your room missie...you know good and well you're only allowed to slit throats on mondays.
Comment by MemoirsOfZidane: Oct 2, 2009 2:39 am
Very well written and again another masterpiece.
If this was your first attempt I can't wait for the second one.
Comment by darknessofcrows: Oct 2, 2009 7:03 am
Not bad at all, you kind of weirded me out with this one. So, yeah very well done, mon ami.... oh, and good vocabulary btw.... *smile*....
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Oct 2, 2009 8:25 am
But but....I dont wanna go to my room Sad face...muahahaha monday is coming! *demented grin*
Comment by niallhybris: Oct 2, 2009 2:23 pm
why is the abandoned shell left behind when the nmess is cleaned? i dont understand that prt. some clever metaphor im too drunk to decipher?
Comment by beautifuldisaster: Oct 2, 2009 2:31 pm
As in the soul left behind the body on earth
Comment by AshleyHalliwell: Oct 2, 2009 5:02 pm
Wow, this was really intense. I could really imagine the scene of rain on windows and blood on the floor. Really great job.
Comment by Xenoz: Oct 2, 2009 10:26 pm
Very well written, love it. =)
Comment by madz13379: Oct 11, 2009 5:30 pm
great job

keep it going
Comment by Telemachus: Oct 4, 2009 4:22 am
I was about to sugget "complements" rather than "compliments" but then I thought - nope, both work equally well
Comment by Psychobabble: Oct 4, 2009 2:26 pm
I like it, very well written.
Comment by SoLittleTime: Oct 5, 2009 4:01 am
stunning.
well done
Comment by MyCrazyLife: Oct 5, 2009 7:13 pm
You creatively put together a great dark piece. I liked it. Great Write.
Comment by shadowknight203: Oct 6, 2009 7:16 am
well done
Comment by Bloodydarklove: Oct 7, 2009 3:52 pm
Its really good. Open smile
You should make more ^.^
Comment by dyingroselost15: Oct 14, 2009 11:44 am
Very well done. I can't wait to read more.
Comment by Callousedheart3: Oct 16, 2009 2:16 pm
Very well written. The images it created for me were realistic, and very creative. Very dark. Awesome Job.
Comment by ghostsprite: Oct 20, 2009 11:35 am
y dus evry1 tink dis is gud?????
I hate it
Comment by bleonard27: Oct 18, 2009 9:56 am
i love this its really good
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