Evil

it's interesting. and i really, really adore the way this goes up until about the 8th line, where the rhythm and theme kind of collapse.

it's esoteric, and that's fine, it's just how perfectly the first 7 lines danced down the screen that gripped my attention. I could try suggesting something for the final lines, but i'm not sure how to make it work myself and it's your work, after all. i can't really say much more, since the piece doesn't provide anything more for me to understand about the subject aside from the way it was written or the emotion put into the words. i like it, though.

wow.
deep and so short.
thats what amazes me.
awesome awesome poem. :]