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Crimson Cure

THIS CRIMSON CURE

In my hand a cure i hold
Thin flat metal icy cold
Not blue gray as is the norm
This ones crimson and its warm

This cure the only way i see
The only way for me to flee
Not from suffring or from cold
But from a lack of one to hold

A pool of crimson on the floor
Life then dwindling a moment more
Eyelids heavy from sleepless night
The world now fading out of sight

My life before my eyes does flash
More full of light than dark grey ash
I feel my thin cold throat grow tight
A gasp for breath in dead of night

Sitting upright in my bed
I feel the sweat on my cold head
Just a dream i realize
But not a dream to sleepy eyes

By Draydan Beziudenhout

by draydanljr
posted on 07/02/2009

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Comment by gelid: Jul 2, 2009 6:21 am
wow, thats really a deep poem. and amazing descriptions excelent work. i just wish that wernet the only cure you could find. there are other ways, please look for them. reach out and talk to someone they'll listen if you need to talk, just please dont take you own life.
Comment by Loveformusicandpoetry1790: Jul 2, 2009 12:33 pm
I really love the rhyming technique.. There are indeed other ways, please do look for them. And just like for gelid, if ever you need someone to talk to you can always talk to me to as well.Very deep poem..*smiles*
Comment by JoeV: Jul 2, 2009 6:57 pm
Wow, I am impressed. Excellent description and meaning. The ending line was amazing. Great poem.
Comment by kazedragon: Jul 3, 2009 9:46 am
How incredibly deep. This is a very good poem. ^^
Comment by draydanljr: Jul 3, 2009 11:03 pm
just how i would imagine it should feel.regardless of my dyer tone i am actually a very content person.i just seem to understand pain well

ps thanx for all the good comment

watch this space
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