Liquid so thick,
Goes running down my throat,
like knifes slashing the sides,
And this is usually when people scream,
But silent yells excapes from my mouth,
No one hears because im always alone,
And ones never forgotten, do not care,
Because i am awkardly set aside,
Words have broken the sound barriers,
That have been turned on for so long,
But the words i might hear, longs me for home,
And homes where i want to die, just to be alone.
Never trust anyone,
To the point where your best exposed,
Because people will lie and tear at your ears,
Just to hear what your weaknesses are,
So they can kill you romanticly sincere,
Water carries me away,
And i say what i must not say,
But i did trust someone,
And then sincierity went away,
This is just a terrible death,
Miles away from where i want to be,
Where i once was.
Your selfishness sickens me,
As fluids dive in my stomach,
Half-empty water lies, in that hole that you made,
You make me believe i did things i did not do,
Just so i will do other things for you,
Im sick of the hunger, sick of you acting like i owe you this,
You will never be right here for too long,
I turn around and all i hear is a shot in the dark,
A bullet lies in the hole that was already there,
hitting ground so cold, liquid oozing outside,
I fall towards the fatal shot taken, knowing already who,
What sickens me the most,
Is that my last thoughts were about you.
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aqua4everposted on 05/31/2008
those were all the mistakes i could find, most their just spelling mainly so be proud and anyway i only search for mistakes in the best of poems, and this this is amazing definitely one of your best, the last line is the best
sheer brilliance, love the poem its some seriously awesome writing
hope your okay though hope things arent too tough on you lately, you know im still here to talk right?
vote up anyways