Do I Come Across as Sweet

Hey why don't we just dance?

Hahahahahaha!!!

It is one thing to point out a difference of opinion that to miss the point all together.

Is this the best you can do?
Come now Darkside, even a school girl could do better.

P.S. It is not nice to stereo type school girls as such. Don't give your self so much credit...or them so little. I have seen some very good poetry on this site by school girls.

It is one thing to point out a difference of opinion "THAT" ? to miss the point all together?

Smooth sentence there grunty.

Hardly the best I can do... but why waste effort on you.

"It is not nice to stereo type school girls as such"

from the guy who said
"even a school girl could do better"

Your a walking contradiction man. Do you listen to Green Day?

In any case... If I wanted to argue with you. I would have messaged you as such. I learned a long time ago you can't change people's opinions though. The poems (can't even call the second one a poem) are up because I felt that your poem couldn't exist in the world without some kind of response.

You should really be flattered. You're poem invoked emotion in its reader and caused me to not only think. But to stand up against it.

You put so much of yourself into the poem that every attack on them can be an attack on you.

Am I not aloud to have opinion on your poetry grunty?

You once wrote a poem about me saying that I tried to control the sites writing.

Look now what you have become.

Nobody can disagree with your poem without you calling up the troops?

You've criticized teens writing about wanting to kill themselves.... even if its for stupid reasons.

Its expression. Maybe not expression on my level. Maybe not expression on your level which is apparently so high up on a pedestal now.

Don't you remember what it was to be a teenager? Obviously. Sure you were a bit scummy.

If you are a teenager and you don't want to die every other day. Your not really growing up are you?



You have a lot of power and popularity on this site now. Something you could truly do something with.

and you are asking ME?
"Is that the best you can do?"

Its never been about attacking you. Its been about my reaction to your poetry.

If you notice. My first comment never said YOU were any of those things. I was telling you what came across in the poem.

As usual you have made it personal. A sadly predictable move by you. So my poem had to become personal back at you. So now it sadly has some venom in it that likely would not have been there.

So there you have it grunty... Yet another over reaction by you. Its become tiresome. That's why I'm not arguing with you other then what I have just said.

You have a lot of talent and I expect better... Something deeper from you then.... The bellyaching of an old man on how love is wasted on the young. So you can insult me all you want grunty..... I'll still be there reading your stuff... Telling you its crap when it is.... and telling you its great when it is.

See, this is typical of you:

"It is one thing to point out a difference of opinion "THAT" ? to miss the point all together?

Smooth sentence there grunty."

Avoid the point and instead focus in on a little one letter typo. And that is not insulting, right?

The fact is, as it appears to me, is that you dislike my poem because you have feelings that this may have happened to you.

"You put so much of yourself into the poem that every attack on them can be an attack on you."

Are you saying that one should not put themselves in their poetry? Then what is the point of it? It is in there as a factual representation of the point of the poem.

This has never been about me. I am an open book...a book that you continually feel the need to burn.

That poem has validity and was meant as an eye opener to naive young girls in an age of ruthlessness, that is all.
You made a choice to focus on me and not the meaning. I have a past that I am not proud of but it can serve to teach or be ignored...whatever. You seem to think that change is impossible or irrelevant. And then you write about my wife and child...hmmm....no offense, right. Awful shallow minded of you there. Even murders may be paroled.
I don't care that you had a problem with the piece, that is fine. The problem is what you chose to focus in on. Me.
It is quite telling of your insecurities.
You intended to insult and so you have. Again.

Hahaha Well monkey boy... As long as we are playing the word play game.

I said "I refuse to argue with you "IN YOUR COMMENTS"

I never said anything about not bringing the fight to home.

Lol... This is really why I didn't want to argue to begin with... Frankly it was mostly because I don't have much of an arguement.

Merely a feeling the built up deep in my stomach worked its way into my head and out my mouth.... Maybe it was bad gas... Maybe grunty is right.. Maybe its my own isecurities. Taken out on the wrong person.

Afta awl docta.. I has me da bi polar diseez

or whatever it is that the psycho doctors are labeling me now.... lol.

Well.... I suppose after this epiphany... I should probably apologize.

I've done terrible things.... TERRIBLE Things.
Severely unintelligent things.

ik this really isnt any of my business but u guys have seemed to sway from the real meaning ppl write poetry. its to let out some emotion that they have inside, a sort of expression in words than in actions or actually speaking. someone elses work is usually their own opinion or view on what they wrote about. its not really in the spirit of poetry to insult someone elses opinion. u may have a different one and may want to write your own opinion, and thats fine. but do you really have to argue about who's view is right? really both of your opinions are right, no one can actually have a wrong opinion. so i say, stop the arguing and get back in the poetry spirit.

"If you notice. My first comment never said YOU were any of those things. I was telling you what came across in the poem."

Word play now?
There's a straw...clutch it quick...awww, it got away.

"As usual you have made it personal. A sadly predictable move by you. So my poem had to become personal back at you. So now it sadly has some venom in it that likely would not have been there."

There are two problems with this...

1) You sound like a man that's just punched his wife "Look what you made me do to you!".

2) If you look at grunty's comment he talks only about your comments and what you seem to do in his eyes...you YOU became personal first, and it was about his child and wife.

See?
Word play is a double edged sword mate.


P.S. I could not disagree with funkyninja898 more about poetry.

...on a side note...

"Regardless of your obvious bait I refuse to argue with you in your comments. Its rude and frankly... I'm tired of it."

Had that been true you wouldn't have posted two things that were always going to get comments in response from grunty.

Really though, if nothing else i'm shocked at how badly you are arguing your corner...in a fight YOU started...odd.

Fuck, you guys are killing me. What happened to fuck you all?

omg....u guys r so childish, geez and da ninja's right bout poetry

If nothing else you both make this site interesting. a talented writer and a angry
teenager.... better than all my children. Old soap opera that my x wife used to record.
any way keep it up it is entertaining. Well some people get their kicks this way.
Keep fighting snd atacking one
another.
Rsurfn2

ahh fuck another one bites the
the dust.....
LMAO....amusing.

I think reading the comment section was much more enjoyable than the poem itself. In-fact, a lot more (No offense to Darkside). Do you guys realize how hilarious it is to watch others argue of things so pity? It's better than an episode of Seinfeld. (Maybe). I sure hope you guys sort out your little differences, with Darkside’s return and all. I hope you start to converse on much cooler things. Such as poems you enjoyed reading or what the fucking weather is like on your side of earth, I don’t care, just stop arguing over who is contradicting themselves or who doesn’t provide the best argument or who started it, blah blah blah. It will be so much more productive and enjoyable to those conversing. Mind you, less fun to read. But. You will benefit more.
PS: FunkyNinja; the poems that you write to just 'let out emotion' they are personal ones: you don't submit them here, because they are usually written in 10 minutes and are absolute junk. If you want to express emotion in a poem, than express it in a form of poetry. Not just-
"Why does life feel empty
Without my mum and dad
The needles fill no gaps
Just create more gaping holes"
Written without thought; just sprawled onto the screen, it's mediocre and has no re-read quality. If you are 'publishing' poetry; be sure it is something that you have put thought into, and have read over at least 3 times. There. Rant over. Sleep time.
(That example ‘angry poem you throw out’ shows no reflection of my own emotions; just what I perceive of other people’s emotions)
Rant over.

Forgive my lack of paragraphs and grammar...I 'copy pasted' straight out of MS word and it turned out all...weird.