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IrishRose
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subject: "fragments" posted: Aug 08, 06 8:58 am Reply with quote
i lie here (lay, lie, lain)
broken shards of pottery

gentle morphine sleep
begging:
'close my eyes'

hear a razor drop like
a million stones on my tin roof

i am a house
eyes like windows
twinkle with false reassurance
gaping, leering as the candle flickers out

sputter, little flame,

die

hissing, whispering,
darkness like a closed door in a hallway painted black

suffocation imminent
this, the Last Will and Testament of...




fragments
this mental breakdown whispers
 
magique8
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subject: posted: Oct 01, 06 3:03 pm Reply with quote
hey, awesome poem, i luv the beginning and i absolutely LUV the end... very effective... sort of very morbid too (ur probably thinking DUH) i just hope you've got happier poetry hidden somewhere as well!
 
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subject: posted: Mar 01, 07 11:51 pm Reply with quote
wow amazing poem! I love the details and metaphors
 
  
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